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Let me by ~CondemmedSoul:iconCondemmedSoul:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open




let me die in your arms and wake up in the next life still in them.
let me dip my body in your blood & feel you surrond me forever.
don't turn away.
you know to much about me how could i let you leave.
i feel as if i cut you with my words.
please stay i'll learn how to treat you right.
you made me belive in a forever after.
that death won't do us part but bring us closer,
let me burn my skin into yours.
i wanna chain you to a bed and live off the pleasure you give me.
to keep you alive i'll feed you my soul.
let me die and be re-born kissing you.
©2004-2009 ~CondemmedSoul
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Author's Comments

for my love because of him i continue to write

[also its all in lower case because i belive that a truely good poem can have the same effect no matter how many erros there are]

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!JennSN Mar 18, 2004, 11:02:06 PM
*cries* Beautiful, can't say anything else about it...
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~babystarr Mar 18, 2004, 11:05:13 PM
Wow thats so beautiful, amazing even. Wow...

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"Love is everything it's cracked up to be. That's why people are so cynical about it. It really is worth fighting for, being brave for, risking everything for, and the trouble is, if you don't risk everything, you risk even more."
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~CondemmedSoul Mar 18, 2004, 11:06:39 PM
wow i just want to say thank you to all the people who leave me these really great comments

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:flagus: = :finger:

:weed: :frog: :horns: :evillaugh:

"Please God help me from my painful situation" :crying:

:headbang:
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~Treeroot Mar 18, 2004, 11:14:45 PM
Its a very good poem. Though, I'm not sure if you meant to do that on purpose, but I think that it's better to make sure that everything is right, word-wise. With this I mean '&', 'Belive' and 'wanna'. I really think the first one doesnt belong in a poem. The second one's just a mistake I think. And wanna, well, I peronally don't like to see that in a poem. But maybe that's just me.

But still, that's all the bad things I can say about this. Very good poem!
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~CondemmedSoul Mar 18, 2004, 11:16:40 PM
nope did it on purpose sorry if i wanted perfection theres dictionaries and spell check

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:flagus: = :finger:

:weed: :frog: :horns: :evillaugh:

"Please God help me from my painful situation" :crying:

:headbang:
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~ChRiSsY14 Mar 18, 2004, 11:37:41 PM
WOW..its soo good...i wanna cry! good job
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~MissDarkAngel Mar 19, 2004, 5:51:29 AM
I think the 'errors' added to the poem as you said. I think this is a wonderful piece and it evoked so many emotions in me.

Beautiful...absolutely wonderful...fantastic.

I can't help but :+fav: this.

Miss Angel :heart: :rose:
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~Blindingtruth248 Mar 20, 2004, 2:55:04 PM
wow thats very beautiful i love it good job
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~cryingangel125 Mar 20, 2004, 8:12:24 PM
*cries* very good poem
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